A Tease for a Sci-Fi Work In Progress

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It’s a first draft and only the start of a much larger story.


 

Chapter 1

 

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Commander Kyvern was pleased. His vessel had remained idle near Quilljume’s sole and rather small satellite. His orders were to observe, gather intelligence on the races evolution as a species, their technological sophistication and most importantly, the status of their military capabilities. He, after two long cycles, had gathered enough intelligence to feel comfortable in returning home to Brayfyre. Master Jyesorm, Lord of the Nine Planets, Ruler of the Four Dimensions and ruling King of Brayfyre would be most pleased.

“Pilot Ashdom, it’s high time we return home. Lock in coordinates and bring us home.” As he said it, Kyvern looked about the main deck of his old yet tried and true Centurion. For fifty three years it had served him well and this mission would be his final trek through the stars. He was pleased it had been a success. Was pleased and honored and humbled to know that the intelligence he gathered would lead to the destruction and death of a race unworthy of sharing the same galaxy with his Master and Lord.

The stars stretched to long white lines. It was a sight he’d seen a thousand times over in his time aboard his Warship, Centurion yet it never got old. This time was no different. It was bold beautiful and bittersweet. He would, now and forever more, take great joy in his memories.

The light of the stars pulled in on themselves and the many burning balls of white-hot gas zipped past leaving behind – for the slightest of moments – pure blackness. Then home.

The nine planets of Jyesorm – as Master Jysorm’s collection was known – are: Yapslav, Bitrobe, Cellux, Xarium, Nyroue, Rettop, Aiton, Nietsnie and Klimm. Home for Commander Kyvern has called Xarium home for half his life. Xarium was and is to this day a military installation. It looked isolated sitting idle out in the deep black but only those in the know knew better. To those ignorant and bold it was a painful lesson to learn, and one they never recovered from. Xarium, though the smallest planet and by far the ugliest in Kyvern’s opinion being lumpy and pink, the ladder due to chemical emissions leftover from terraforming the planet two millennia ago, was by far the most sought after by enemy forces for obvious reasons: destroy it and the other eight planets would fall. It was the epitome of easier said than done. Many have tried and many have failed. Many more would undoubtedly follow suit.

“Initiating automated docking procedure,” Pilot Ashdom announced. To the untrained eye it would seem as though the Warship Centurion was rotating counterclockwise and steadily slowing to dock with nothing at all. Just because you can’t see something doesn’t mean it’s not there. It was, and so were many other features of the mighty Brayfyre army. To say it was a Misique nest would be an understatement. Stretched out like the web of an interstellar Aranea were millions of docking ports for warships, battle cruisers, nitro-rammers, interstellar bombers, destroyers, wreckers, and loopers.

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The Girl with Yin Eyes – Review

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Synopsis

 

It’s the end of the nineteenth century in San Francisco’s Chinatown, and ghost hunters from the Maoshan traditions of Daoism keep malevolent spiritual forces at bay. Li-lin, the daughter of a renowned Daoshi exorcist, is a young widow burdened with yin eyes—the unique ability to see the spirit world. Her spiritual visions and the death of her husband bring shame to Li-lin and her father—and shame is not something this immigrant family can afford. When a sorcerer cripples her father, terrible plans are set in motion, and only Li-lin can stop them. To aid her are her martial arts and a peachwood sword, her burning paper talismans, and a wisecracking spirit in the form of a human eyeball tucked away in her pocket.

Review

 

Let us begin with the negatives.

The beginning of the story is a bit like an old engine in how it takes a little while to really crank up and get to revving at full horsepower. But once it does it’s full speed ahead. That’s my only negative. And really I can put the fault on this being my first M. H. Boroson novel and my needing to get used to his style.

The story could have been longer, had more depth to it, especially the characters, but they were fleshed out enough for me to connect with them. The story could have hit much harder that way. That – to bring some positivity to this negativity – does say something about the story. When it doesn’t hit as hard as it could but is still good, that’s special.

Now for the positives.

The originality of the story in and of itself was impressive. But more impressive was the true-to-life aspects, the historical accuracies M.H. Boroson brought to the story. I felt like I was in Chinatown with Li-lin. You could tell that the author knew what he wrote and wrote what he knew. I enjoyed how wildly unique the story was. The monsters, Daoism, spiritual visions, the folklore, all of it. There were pleasant twists and turns, and I enjoyed the journey. Can’t wait for more.

I highly recommend it. It’s a one-of-a-kind tale worth the couple days it’d take you to read it.

4 out of 5

Sirens by Joseph Knox – My Review

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It took time for this book to heat up, to get interesting, but when it did the finally blazing flame flickered out rather quickly. I was always a step ahead of the protagonist and I couldn’t, at all, buy in to his situation. He’s made to go undercover, ordered per his job, yet his boss was going to use what he did whilst undercover (none of it an undercover agent wouldn’t be expected to do ) against him to put him in prison. He’s given a choice once his services are further required, both options will leave him with nothing – yet he’s hopeful for a good outcome even though he’s already said there wasn’t one. It really made no sense to me.

Then there is his boss, his … partner? The politician, the politicians daughter … none of them were fleshed out at all, less so than the main character. Then there is Zane and his Sirens, none of which are fleshed out in any convincing way.

The first person the story was written in didn’t help either. I truly believe this type of story is best suited for third person. It could have been amazing if it were.

The best thing about this book is the cover. It’s absolutely beautiful.

I received this book from Blogging for Books and Crown Publishing in return for an honest review.

2.5 stars

 

The Radicals, by Ryan Mcilvain – My Review

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The cover is beautiful. It has almost a felt kinda feel to it and I dig that a lot.

That’s about all the good I can say about the story. It’s a book where the narrator accounts his destruction. It starts with a tennis match, ramps up with a car chase that ends in such an unrealistic way that I had to put the book down. You simply do not go out of your way to chase the person who hit you down, risking your like and the life of others, simply to take a bribe. There were hints at cutesy prose and unnecessary details that told me everything I was about to go through if I continued with this book. I wasn’t interested.

A lot of verbal gesticulating with no real substance. I would avoid this story unless you don’t mind fancy prose, and unwanted second-by second accounts of everything.

0.5 out 5 Stars.

An Arc copy was provided to me through Bloggingforbooks.com in return for an honest review.

Character Profile Worksheet for Authors

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I found this to be incredibly helpful, and I hope you do too.

Character Profile Worksheet

 

Basic Statistics

Name:
Age:
Nationality:
Socioeconomic Level as a child:
Socioeconomic Level as an adult:
Hometown:
Current Residence:
Occupation:
Income:
Talents/Skills:
Salary:
Birth order:
Siblings (describe relationship):
Spouse (describe relationship):
Children (describe relationship):
Grandparents (describe relationship):
Grandchildren (describe relationship):
Significant Others (describe relationship):
Relationship skills:

 

Physical Characteristics:

Height:
Weight:
Race:
Eye Color:
Hair Color:
Glasses or contact lenses?
Skin color:
Shape of Face:
Distinguishing features:
How does he/she dress?
Mannerisms:
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.)
Health:
Hobbies:
Favorite Sayings:
Speech patterns:
Disabilities:
Style (Elegant, shabby etc.):
Greatest flaw:
Best quality:

 

Intellectual/Mental/Personality Attributes and Attitudes

Educational Background:
Intelligence Level:
Any Mental Illnesses?
Learning Experiences:
Character’s short-term goals in life:
Character’s long-term goals in life:
How does Character see himself/herself?
How does Character believe he/she is perceived by others?
How self-confident is the character?
Does the character seem ruled by emotion or logic or some combination thereof?
What would most embarrass this character?

 

Emotional Characteristics

 

Strengths/Weaknesses:
Introvert or Extrovert?
How does the character deal with anger?
With sadness?
With conflict?
With change?
With loss?
What does the character want out of life?
What would the character like to change in his/her life?
What motivates this character?
What frightens this character?
What makes this character happy?
Is the character judgmental of others?
Is the character generous or stingy?
Is the character generally polite or rude?

 

Spiritual Characteristics

Does the character believe in God?
What are the character’s spiritual beliefs?
Is religion or spirituality a part of this character’s life?
If so, what role does it play?

 

How the Character is Involved in the Story

Character’s role in the novel (main character? hero? heroine? Romantic interest? etc.):
Scene where character first appears:
Relationships with other characters:

1. Character’s Name: — (Describe relationship with this character and changes to relationship over the course of the novel).
2. Character’s Name: — (Describe relationship with this character and changes to relationship over the course of the novel).
3. Character’s Name: — (Describe relationship with this character and changes to relationship over the course of the novel).
4. Character’s Name: — (Describe relationship with this character and changes to relationship over the course of the novel).

Two Dukes are Better Than One by Lorna James

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I received a free copy of this book from Netgalley in exchange for an honest review.


 

As usual, I start with my thoughts on the cover. It isn’t great, a bit hohum, but still gets the job done. All and all, not bad.

Now for my review

Solid story that doesn’t take it’s time getting started. I don’t mean it jumps right into the sex. Rather it takes off story-wise rather than taking time to build up momentum. I enjoyed the humor weaved into it, which, for an erotica novel isn’t always easy. Because the point of the story is to get you excited and so on.

The dialogue is crisp.

Characters aren’t one-dimensional which is another bonus for a story centered around getting you steamed up.

Some descriptions like ‘hard as a rock’ annoyed me as they’re cliche and overused. But that’s really nitpicking on my part. They were there and gone and you were more interested on what was happening and what would happen rather than dwelling on those words.

The build-up to the sex was rather well done. Usually I get annoyed when I have to wait to get to the good bits, but not here. The story was pleasant. It didn’t knock my socks off so-to-speak, but I liked it. In saying that though, it could have been a bit shorter. Not by much, merely a smidge. Other reviews spoke of the stories ending being rushed. In my opinion it

Now, about the sex. It would have been better if it was a little more specific, but, still, it was enjoyable. Not the greatest in the world, but enjoyable.


 

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YouTube Demonetization and YouTube Channels you should Follow

YouTube has dealt a mighty blow to many channels that are up and coming. Why? To help those who have already solidified themselves in the game of monetization. Those who have millions of followers. That doesn’t seem too bright does it? Nope. Not at all.

YouTube should be worried about its future, not about the fads holding it up for the time being. The future lies within the following YouTubers. I urge you to follow their pages. They provide content of quality, not of the type you’ll forget in the blink of an eye.

Edward Lorn

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(I write one for Lorn as he currently doesn’t have one)

From this author/vlogger you get a random selection of videos. All of them are brilliant. He reviews books, talks about his own works. He too has a wide variety of Stephen King related videos. My favorite though, are his ‘Is it Nasty’ series in which he and his wife taste new drinks and foods of a more unique sort. Their reactions are always priceless.

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/user/edwardlorn/featured

 

GoIndieNow

(Description)

GoIndieNow is an online platform that supports, highlights, and fosters Indie Artists from all art forms. We do that right here on YouTube with shows, live panels and broadcasts, and Special Presentations. If you are an Indie Artist we want to help get you seen. If you are looking for the next book, movie, or album to fall in love with and meet the artists that make those arts as close to in person as you can, then subscribe to our channel and stay tuned as we grow and bring you many, many artist of the world.

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/user/joeidfilms73/featured

 

anaisbelieve

(Description)

I’m just a Canadian armed with tea and maple syrup. Join my patreon poem of the month club! https://www.patreon.com/anaisbelieve I write stuff! I play games and smother myself with cosmetics 😉 I drink tea! I have no idea what I’m doing. Channel Music by: the letter J music https://soundcloud.com/the-letter-j-music Channel Art Made by: SpectreRage. Check out her youtube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCkYl5hiviPhT-MSXbh3RQQg?&ab_channel=SpectreRage

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/user/anaisbelieve/featured

 

Travis Reads Books

(Description)

My name is Travis and I read books. All kinds of books. This is my booktuber channel where I talk about books and book-related things.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCwztdMh_Vf0s9RkwjA_gFUw/featured

 

Sunshine Somerville

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MG Fantasy Author of “A Fairly Fairy Tale” I’m left-handed. I have a Kota Mark tattoo on my shoulder. I can’t say the word ‘suggested’ to save my life. My favorite liquor is vodka. Sharks make me happy. If I had a superpower, I’d want to fly. I’ve never found blond men attractive. I hate water chestnuts. I love peanut butter. I’ve never liked coffee (update: unless Cuban). I grew up on a hunting preserve. My favorite word is ‘euphoric.’ My least favorite word is ‘stool.’ I look like a cross between my mom and my dad’s sister. I’m good at cartwheels.

^ …. she also updates her works in process, does YouTube tags and is generally rather awesome.

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC7omlMreXQQ9IQQr9JqpxIw/featured

 

Christie Stratos

(Description)

Sunday afternoon livestreams, 2pm Eastern.
All my vids are writing, reading, and publishing related.
Author of ANATOMY OF A DARKENED HEART and LOCKE AND KEYE, available on Amazon, Smashwords, Barnes and Noble, Kobo, and more!
Buy paperbacks directly from my website to get them signed, personalized, and theme gift-wrapped. 😀

Videos are sometimes on other channels, including GoIndieNow and hosting The Writer’s Edge.

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC-WAopzXd0sKnJ6UTIlTWDg/featured

 

Author Ashley Uzzell

(Description)

This channel is all about indie authors and their amazing books. Come take a peek and discover a fun new read today.

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCUoRrX0_mN_E3-9eqFjyxnQ/featured

J.D. Estrada Writer

(Description)

The mind of an indie author is pretty random and I am no exception. Music, tea, writing, and life. There are no topics out of bounds and I do so enjoy a lovely slice of random. So if you’re curious, check out my particular rabbit hole, and let’s see how far down it goes.

Peace, love, and Maki Rolls

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCgwnLN0q3ewrxEkvOLI4o5Q/feed

 

The Dark Realm Diaries

(Description)

A channel hosted by Michael J Eliott, author of Portraits of Dread and Choice Cuts-A Bite From The Dark Realm. A channel for lovers of horror and thrillers. Featuring, horror book and movie reviews, of the creepy and supernatural.Facts and trivia about scarey creatures like vampires, werewolves and more. Horror Movie and book trailers and much more. Take our quizes and test your knowledge about the creepy, paranormal, supernatural and undead.
Take a seat and enjoy our Creepy pasta stories, 100% original Creepy Pasta, written and illustrated by Michael J Elliott with stories from some of the best indie authors around the world.
New videos uploaded every Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday (Australian Time).

(Link)

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCAGz7Xnb71LOlorRWwU_h4Q/featured